tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6638528300266955615.post3809268658356869282..comments2023-07-05T15:52:36.029+03:00Comments on Laptop Diary: Blood And ButterMohammed Musthafahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10211307048155699461noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6638528300266955615.post-21730098199306172072010-09-18T08:10:49.545+03:002010-09-18T08:10:49.545+03:00I knew there was a twist to the story the moment y...I knew there was a twist to the story the moment you left those 'gaps' in the story. She sees a man outside... she sends William out... he understands... blood splatters and yet it's your story... I almost guessed it. But the ending was still a surprise to me. Great job, Musthafa!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07985268676317106392noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6638528300266955615.post-17807750408987886132010-07-05T08:54:28.939+03:002010-07-05T08:54:28.939+03:00I just typed in "peanut butter consumption he...I just typed in "peanut butter consumption headaches" in Google, and came up with a number of results. What I mostly found is that it's listed as a trigger food for migraines.oklahoma mesotheliomahttp://mesothelioma-clinic.orgnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6638528300266955615.post-68274168315404118322010-07-05T08:53:24.492+03:002010-07-05T08:53:24.492+03:00I have had massive headaches, and even now I am ha...I have had massive headaches, and even now I am having a headache. I am beginning to think there is something in peanuts that constricts or slows down blood flow and causes them, so am I right or is there some other cause?oklahoma mesotheliomahttp://mesothelioma-clinic.orgnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6638528300266955615.post-29300999197883601822010-06-08T20:15:11.240+03:002010-06-08T20:15:11.240+03:00I agree with the first comment. Nothing new as far...I agree with the first comment. Nothing new as far as story goes. However, you write exceeding well and can create good imagery with words. Keep up the good work :)All Talk and No Actionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10241065789942589469noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6638528300266955615.post-85620721266285956182010-06-03T19:57:31.728+03:002010-06-03T19:57:31.728+03:00Please so something about your blog. The white tex...Please so something about your blog. The white text clashes with the background. And the blog does not even load at times.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6638528300266955615.post-84546696322834027122010-05-25T19:10:35.385+03:002010-05-25T19:10:35.385+03:00Nice work! Another success! btw, why do you keep k...Nice work! Another success! btw, why do you keep killing people or making them suicide? :P Sounds like you're a crime writer. Anyway, back to the story-> The end had a nice twist, unexpected of course. The narration was pretty good. I also noticed that you began 'description' as well. That's fine of course, at least until its not TOO big.<br />The plot is a little clichéd, an Viveknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6638528300266955615.post-59265726771962079032010-05-25T16:32:30.243+03:002010-05-25T16:32:30.243+03:00Narrating style is really good, but the content di...Narrating style is really good, but the content didn't give me the punch for some reason...One Weird Guyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06426292797082220876noreply@blogger.com